In the Madeleine L’Engle Room (F2K): Lesson 2 Activating the Senses

Update (12/10): This Lesson was chosen for the weekly ezine over at F2K. I’m super-chuffed and amazingly humbled. 

So, Lesson 2 was a doozy for me and I suppose it’s because I’ve never really paid that much attention to which of my senses were activated when I read. I always relied on the overall feel and not the specific evocation of the senses from each sentence read.

Write one (1) paragraph using all the senses. Include at least three (3) words or phrases that suggest something without saying what the sense is.

Lesson 2 consisted of three parts actually. The first was to come up with sentences for each of the 8 senses and feedback from peers would be to identify which of the senses the writer wanted to evoke. The second part is as above. And the third was to read James Joyces’ A Little Cloud and identify sentences which evoked each of the 8 senses. It was the first time I’ve read James Joyce so I had to take it slow and break it down into individual sentences and denote each with a sense, wherever relevant. Even to me, that sounded anal.

Anyway, for Part 2 of my exercise, I decided to explore Toby and Chase a little bit more and came up with this:

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The restaurant staff directed Chase to the sliding doors that led out to the balcony beside the dining area. Her taffeta gown rustled gently and tickled her ankles as she moved briskly towards the sliding doors, pushed it open and sauntered out.   She was immediately caressed by the light of the moon which casted the landscape below her in an eerie pastel overtone. Tobacco smoke lingered on the balcony, perhaps from its previous occupant. Chase hoped she’d be able to wash it off her rented gown. She sighed thinking that the night had not panned out the way she expected. She leaned against the balustrade and removed her cherry lip gloss from her purse, touched up her lips then licked them, savouring the tart sweetness of the lip gloss.
(word count 130)
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I’m now second-guessing myself, wondering if I got this right. Awaiting feedback.
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